Tuesday, April 13, 2010

How To Better Write A News Story

From an AP story:-


...About 300,000 Israeli settlers live in the West Bank. Many Israelis oppose the settlements and are in favor of most be removed [sic! *] in exchange for peace with the Palestinians.


That should be:-

Over a half-million Israelis have made their homes in territory that is considered disputed, 300,000 reside in Judea and Samaria with another 200,000 living in Jerusalem neighborhoods across the former Green Line boundary. There is strong opposition within Israel to the Jewish communities but it is limited to media, academic and cultural elites. There has never been a majority in favor of expelling Jews from their homes in exchange for peace with the local Arabs and all government coalitions have continued to build in these areas.



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Funny, it's different here:-

About 300,000 Israeli settlers live among some 2.5 million Palestinians in the West Bank. Many Israelis oppose the settlements and are in favor of removing them in exchange for peace with the Palestinians.


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UPDATE

Asked whether they would support Obama imposing a plan dividing Jerusalem and removing the Jordan Valley from Israeli control, 91 percent of Israelis who expressed an opinion said no and 9% said yes, according to the poll of 503 Israelis, which was taken by Ma’agar Mohot on Sunday and Monday and had a 4.5% margin of error.

Eighty-one percent said it was improper for Obama to try to force such a plan on the two sides, while 19% of those who expressed an opinion said it was proper.

The poll asked whether it would create enduring peace or enduring conflict should Jerusalem be divided, with Jewish neighborhoods remaining part of Israel and Arab neighborhoods becoming part of a Palestinian state. Eighty-four percent said conflict and 16% said peace.

The numbers were similar for the Jordan Valley, where 90% opposed relinquishing Israeli control and 10% were in favor.

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