US pushes J'lem, PA to resume talks
By ASSOCIATED PRESS
16/04/2010 06:01
is quite unnecessary.
It should have been rewritten thus:
US to Israel, PA: Resume talks
34 vs. 30 characters in my version's favor so there is even a saving of space.
Israel is a country, a sovereign one.
Jerusalem is a city.
The Palestine Authority is a landesmenschaft, at best
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I 100% like the AP version better. Don't you think there is the assumption that the writer is recognizing Jerusalem as the capital of Israel? In your version, you are equating the countries of US, Israel and the land area of PA as three separate countries.
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